<Topic> Q) Some people believe that it is best to accept
a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others
argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both
these views and give your own opinion |
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Sometimes, we face situations which It is argued
that people have to accept any situations that are unavoidable. For instance,
people in poverty are not likely to be given many opportunities to earn high incomes
or have professional jobs. The reason can be that being experts or being medical
professionals takes a long time and money as these kinds of jobs require However, a
lot of people try hard to overcome the circumstances. Firstly, since financial
scarcity is a well-known common difficulty in society, innumerable experts confess
their poor childhood. To surmount the situation, they read books which were
given by their school countless time on the street and register the school
competition to achieve scholarship. All of them opine that if we do not try
to break the wall in front of us, we have to remain behind the wall, under
the dark shadow. (이 문장의 경우 조금 문학적이네요. 이게 좋거나 나쁘다는 말은 아니고, 그냥 코멘트입니다.) I agree with those well-known influencers since I believe in a famous
proverb ‘no pain, no gain.’ Trying is much better than being just where we
are. To conclude, even
though there are lots of people that believe the given bad situations are inevitable
and not able to be conquered, I firmly would like to opine that the intention
to overcome it far outweighs accepting it. |
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Grammar |
Vocabulary |
Cohesion and Coherence |
Task Response |
7/9.0 |
8/9.0 |
7/9.0 |
8/9.0 |
감사합니다.
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