■ DirectionYou have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of The quality of writing and on how well your response presents the points in the lecture and the relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words.■ QuestionSummarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the points made in the reading
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Your Answer ▼ The diagram shows how carbonated drinks can be arrived in supermarkets, explaining specific stages in detail.
Overall, there are five stages all together ranging from raw water to be carbonated drinks which can be conveyed to the supermarkets where we can consume carbonated drinks on the rack easily.
Firstly, the raw water which derived from factories goes through the filter and this process purifies water makes water purify by getting rid of detrimental ingredients by adding water softener and chemicals up. Secondly, electric heaters warm warms up the water and its air from evaporation is turned to liquid again, running through the cooling pipe and it is also combined combines with carbon dioxide from outside. Carbonated water arrives in a mixing tank, and it shakes up carbonated water with other various ingredients which make carbonated water look more delicious including colouring, syrup, flavour. Furthermore, it goes through the last filter and it is divided with two forms in bottle and can, which are a bottle and can respectively. Finally, after packaging it can be conveyed till the supermarkets in the end, and consumers can get carbonated water conveniently in the store. |
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EXAMINER’S USE ONLY | Total Score: 6.5/9 | Examiner: | | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Score | 7/9 | 6/9 | 7/9 | 6/9 |
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내용 분석에는 크게 문제가 없었지만, 아직 문법에 있어서는 불안불안합니다. 문법 한정으로는 충분히 5점으로 내려갈 여지도 있어요.
제가 고쳐드린 건 굳이 안 보셔도 되니까, 그보다 스스로 문법 공부를 통해 정확한 문장을 쓰는 연습을 해주세요!
수고하셨습니다 :) |
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걸린 시간은 18분, 목표 점수는 7.0 입니다 감사합니다!