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주제: Leisure &
Technology
These days, there are increasingly many concerns and researches between leisure and technology. Some
people believe that the correlation is a positive thing, while others claim that it
is an inverse relation. In my opinion, I disagree with the latter’s view, so I will
discuss the reason why below.
First of all, developing
technologies can give a more opportunities to get unique information. We can prepare
more before doing something by exploiting technologies such as doing various kinds of projects, travel,
and so on by exploiting technologies. When I was a university student majoring studying
in Economics for developing countries, I would go to Vietnam for one month in winter
vacation as a team leader. Using the well-improved Internet system in Korea facilitated
to access diverse information in about Vietnam to us, in the end, we could reach to a
unique place where has minority of residents lived in Vietnam and enjoy our spare time.
It made us to be persons who have creative thinking than before.>> 사람이 적은 특별한 장소에 가서 그저 창의적인 생각을 고안해낸단게 단계적으로 제대로 설명이 안 됩니다 Secondly, the modern
technology is possible to contribute to advances for many kinds of products.
Through developing technologies, it is easier>> 비교급이 나온다면 뒤에 than 이 나와야 합니다 to interact between companies and
customers. Customers’ needs can be reflected to new products including creative
things in real time. For example, users' interface in mobile is surprisingly improved
too simple and easy from pushing the button system to touching the display. This
is a creative thing itself.
In conclusion, surely
depending on persons people in case by case, but I strongly advocate that modern
technology has many advantages to enjoy creatively leisure time creatively. It is no doubt
that technologies, which are exploited in balancing, contribute to daily life as
well as holiday period to be more productive.
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