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The topics about whether to attend a live
performance or enjoy watching the same events on TV>> 문제를 따오는 것은 정말 좋지 않습니다 is a controversial one. Enjoying
the some events on TV has advantages. However, I prefer to attend a live
performance more than watching on TV. I will notate argue my view about the
issues with some examples.
First of all, attending a live event is
more exciting and interesting. That is because people can feel the passion of
performances, singing loudly cheering songs and meeting such a insane person and meet their favorite celebrities
at the real time. Secondly of all >> 처음과 같아 바꿔드렸습니다, the cheering together is the mostly important
point of enjoying in a live sports game. In Korean’s baseball stadium>> A stadium for baseball in Korea, there is
a big competition between the players and between the spectators because course
both teams play games >> 무슨 말인지 모르겠습니다 such the a war, and each team’s fans have emulation emulate to
cheer louder than their opposition.
Another advantage is that a live
performance can bring the affirmative implication to people who live in a gloomy life. I suggest that
enjoying the live events can reduce stress more than watching TV. Then, people
would take back comfortable emotion >> 잘 모르겠습니다 , >>콤마 빼주세요 and they may be more active. Thus, I think
live events bring positive effects.
In summary, there are diverse limits to
enjoy with only TV. I prefer to attend a live performance because it is more
attractive and active, also it can bring positive impressions to many people.
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