IELTS Writing 캠브릿지9권 Test4 Task2 / 140210 / 35분25초

Title : Language means the diversity and spirit, even culture.

Nowadays, as the globalization trend is being accelerated, both positive and negative outcomes show on the ground. I think the declining the number of languages is the most important negative effect of them. Some people say that it could make life more easier, but I believed this to be is a very shortsighted view.

First of all, there are several dominant languages on the worldwide, especially English. So any kinds of problem could >> if절의 동사가 현재면 주절의 조동사도 현재가 와야합니다 not be occurred happended >> occur는 자동사라 수동태가 될 수 없습니다, if travelors or business people are able to use English well. As even a child knows, English is now the best most powerful language. Being good at English is the great solution to live easy in almost countries.>> 글이 테스크에서 벗어났습니다

Second is the diversity. Obviously, the globalization makes several countries to be united in network and total standards. However, not only environment but also human being>> 가운데 - 빼주세요 must need to maintain the diversity, >> because 앞에 콤마는 안 들어갑니다 because it can improve our curiousity and creativity. Maybe, human’s potential and improvements basement are decreased as the diversity is declined.>> 어떻게 어떤 것에 대한 호기심과 창의력을 향상시키나요?

Finally, language equals the culture. Like Such as just a word has the meaning and background, the language is consists of a history and culture. To exactly understand exactly a country’s ethic, understanding of the language with their history and culture is very essential. For example, just several decades ago, Japanese imperialism had prevented had intended to replace from using Korean with Japanese, because they obviously knew obviously our spirit and ethical activity are based on our language. But our grandfathers ancestors resisted to their illegal and crucial policy, which means that they wanted to totally break our country.and so As a result, we can use our own language and improve our own culture.

In conclusion, languages are the pillar and base of diversity and culture. Thus, not only the nations who have which are in a crisis on their remaining language themselves, but also the global authorities should make a barricade on the language-decreasing trend.

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