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We can largely divide studying type into two ways. The first one is
to study by oneself, and the second one is to study together by making groups.
Among them, I think studying study by oneself should be the fundamental way of study
than study studying together even though mutual studying is also very important.
The
reason why I put more superiority on the self-studying is, I do respect and
believe the effectiveness of group-studying. If we want to study together with
other people, there must be something in our brain to share with the others.
The true power of group-studying is are inspiring one’s thinking by borrowing
other creative people’s ideas and having the chances of correcting the possible
deficits of self-study based thinking and ideas. Thus, to maximize the
effectiveness of co-studying, we should be confident and clear about our own ideas
and studies. 혼자서 공부하는 것을 옹호하는 입장인데 여럿이 공부하는 것의 장점만 너무 나열하고 있어서 논점이 잘 전달되지 않습니다. '내가 혼자 공부하는 것을 더 선호하는 이유는~'으로 문단을 시작했으니 뒷부분 내용은 연결이 어색합니다. However, these confidence and clearness are come after our devoted
hard studying with ourselves.
Apart from the comparative and relational
order between self-studying and group studying, studying by oneself has its own
strengths. First of all, we can manage our time as effectively as we can. We do
not have to consider other people’s schedule to keep maintaining the study we have
already conducted. This freedom of time scheduling will secure our own
effectiveness on studying. Secondly, studying by oneself will provide us with the quietness
that can help us to maintain maintaining consistent concentration. Without talking, without
laughing, and without non-effective communication, we can do our best to
concentrate on our subject that requires continued devotion of one’s time and
mind. Through this concentration, we will be able to achieve what we have wanted.
In conclusion, I would prefer to study
alone due to some strong points of self-studying. However, the other reason why
I choose self-studying is not because of the inferiority of group-studying but
because of the respect that I have, to the proper and effective group-studying.
IELTS 1-9 score scale score: 6 competent user
혼자 공부하면 좋은 점들 내용이 다 좋습니다. 본론1은 도입부가 어색하니 수정이 필요할 것 같아요. 그룹스터디의 장점도 있지만 장점을 얻기 어렵다는 점을 강조하면 좀 더 입장이 명확한 글이 될 수 있을 것 같아요. 수고하셨습니다!
아이엘츠 라이팅 채점기준 참고하세요 - TA/TR(Task Achievement/Task Response) 문제에 정확히 답변, 적정 분량 - CC(Coherence and Cohesion) 일관성, 응집성 - LR(Lexical Resource) 다양한 어휘표현 - GR(Grammartical Range and Accuracy) 문법 다양성, 정확성
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