The trend of increasing tourism causes environmental problems in many parts of the world. What are the main causes of pollution it creates? What can be done to reduce it?
In this day and age, the tendency of increasing tourism industry would cause environmental issues in numerous parts of the world. In this essay, I will discuss the main causes of pollution which it could create and suggest some of the possible solutions to reduce it.
To begin with, there are several reasons why the trend of increasing tourism are causing environmental pollution. One of the main reasons is that the number of flights made through the use of an airplane of using an airplane which is one of the most widely used transportations in tourism have increased both internationally and domestically can increase both international and domestic flights. It is well-known that aircrafts tend to emit much more carbon dioxide than other transports such as buses, trains and ships and as a result they might create serious air pollution. Another significant reason is the problem of garbage. It is often the case that tourists who are keen on convenience during their travels seem to often use disposable products and throw these rubbish away in tourist destinations like a national park, a famous beach or a mountain, which would cause soil and water pollution.
To tackle the aforementioned issue, I would suggest various solutions that can be effective. One of the most effective solutions could be that governments should limit the number of flights by imposing high taxes on all airlines. This may have some positive effects on reducing carbon dioxide, and consequently the main source of air pollution would decrease and this will be good for the atmosphere. Another efficient solution might be that tourists should use less disposable products and throw those ones away in a bin properly. The effect that using less disposable goods might have on soil and air pollution may have positive consequences.
In conclusion, it seems that there are some issues that need to be addressed. However, these issues could be addressed if all of the airlines reduced the number of flights and if tourists used less disposable products. (현재 결론에서 핵심 표현인 '관광 산업 증가에 따른 문제' 가 전혀 작성되지 않았습니다. 이걸 꼭 추가해주셔야 해요.)
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