▶ Your Answer : The bar graph below illustrates the percentage of the sports played by boys and girls in New Zealand in 2002. Except the Athletics, Basketball and Tennis, girls and boys showed a great difference in favor of the sports. When it comes to the girls' preference, it seems clear that more than a fourth of the girls preferred to play netball while there are is almost no boys who play netball.<(not an unified information) Plus to that, girls showed very high favor in swimming. But except these two sports, there are is no sports whose percentage is higher than 10%. On the other hand, boys showed interests in various types of sports. But the most frequently played sport is soccer, which is almost 25%. But this is still less than the percentage of the girls who chose swimming. Except soccer and swimming, they chose cricket, martial arts, basketball and tennis in not that big difference in percentage which are from at around 5% to 10%. Except the athletic, which was not that popular in both groups and the netball which was highly preferred by the girls but by no boys.<(이 문장을 무엇을 말해주는지 잘 모르겠습니다. not a complete idea인 것 같습니다.)
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