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The three pie graphs illustrate the annual expenditure by a certain school in United Kingdom over an interval of 20 years. >> 그래프를 안 보는 사람한테 설명한다고 생각하고 작성해주셔야 합니다 interval 20 years 면 언제부터 언제까진지 모릅니다 There are five criteria for spending: teacher's salaries, furniture and equipment, resources, other worker's salaries, >> 세개 이상 나열에서 마지막 and/or 앞에 콤마 붙여줍니다 and insurance.
During the given period, teacher's salaries took up the majority of the total. After peaking reaching at a half percentage >> 0.5 % 인가요? in 1991, it was slightly decreasing decreased slligtly by 5 percent. Furniture and equipment bottomed out at 5 percent in 1991, and then increased remarkably to 23 percent. In contrast, the resources saw the opposite trend. It rose from 15 percent to 20 percent in 1991, whereas it had a sudden decrease to 9 percent in 2001. When it comes to other worker's salaries, it was gradually reducing reduced gradually from 28 percent to 15 percent over a span of 20 years. While insurance was steadily increasing increased steadily during the research period, it still took the lowest percentage of the annual expenditure in the school.
Overall, this school spent nearly two thirds of the annual budget on wages. On the other hand, the funding of resources or furniture and equipment remain one third of the total.
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