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The chart compares the popularity of sports by gender in New Zealand in by the year 2002.
As clearly seen from the figures, Netball was the most popular sports for females. A quarter of females played Netball, while only about 2% of males played it. In contrast, the most popular sports for males were soccer in which just under 25% of the men played soccer, while with played only 5% women played soccer. Males and females played swimming at about 13% and just below 23% respectively.
In terms of Basketball and Tennis played, they had similar figures at about between about 6% and just under 10% in 2002.<(by which gender?) Girls played athletics more than boys at 4% and 3%, respectively. Also, there was a significant difference in Cricket that the percentage of men played about 10 times more than that of women at 10% and 1% respectively.
According to the bar charts provided, while most of women liked to play Netball, Soccer is the most popular sports for to men. <(repetitive) The popularity of sports in New Zealand was different by gender over the research period. <(concluding하는 느낌을 주고 있지 않습니다)
Score: 5.5 Comment: 내용 정리/grouping을 더 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 내용을 어떤 방식으로 정리를 하셨는지 잘 모르겠습니다. 그 외에는 표현에 조금 더 신경을 쓰시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 또한 men and women 보다는 boys and girls가 더 맞는 표현입니다. 학생들 대상으로 한 survey이기 때문에 men and women은 조금 어울리지 않습니다. 수고 하셨습니다. |