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The pie charts provide information concerning the ages of the citizens of two countries, Yemen and Italy, in 2000 and predictions for 2050.
Overall, there is a decreasing trend for at the age of 0-14 years, while an increase at the age of over 60 years in both countries between two years.
It is notable that ages 15-59 group generations showed a different pattern between the two countries. It will reduce from 61.6 to 46.2 percent in Italy during the period. However, 15-59 ages populations of Yemen will rise by about 10 percent from 2000 to 2050. It is definitely an opposite trend compared with Italy.
On the other hand, young generations, the population for 0-14 years old group , and old generation, over 60 years group, will fall in Yemen and Italy, though, there are different amount of populations in the two countries. The populations of 0-14 years old group in Italy count for 14.3 percent in 2000, but for 11.5 percent in 2050. In addition, in Yemen, it starts at 50.1 percent in 2000, and finishes at 37.0 percent in 2050.
Furthermore, there is a growing pattern in over 60 years old citizens. It is interesting that both countries show an increase from 2000 to 2050. It accounts for 3.6 percent in Yemen and 24.1 percent in Italy in 2000, but in 2050, they will be at 5.7 percent (Yemen), and 42.3 percent (Italy), respectively.
Score: 6.5 Comment: 내용을 잘 grouping해주셨습니다. 다만 문법과 표현에 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 문장구조/형용사/article 사용에 주의 해주시기를 바랍니다. Young generation/old generation라는 reference는 어울리지 않는 것 같습니다. 그러기에는 15-59 group에 both young and old generation이 포함이 되었습니다. 또한 specificity에도 조금 더 신경을 써주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 그리고 2050년도 정보는 expectation/projection인 만큼 전체적으로 그렇다고 전달을 해주시면 좋을 것 같습니다. 수고 하셨습니다. |