Opinion might vary on the issue of whether technology prevents children from improving creativity. There are various opinions about the relation between theimprovement of the technology and the creativity of human. Some people say that the technology improvement can affect the children's creativity. Personally, I entirely disagree with this idea. The two reasons for my opinion are as follows.
First, advanced today offer many items which makes new things possible many items which makes new things possible are provided by the technology today.
In addition, the technology enables children to access information easily.
First of all, the technology gives people a source of the possibility for a creative development. The modification is performed by coping the previous results, which can leads to a new creation starts copying and transformation. Thing what is modified from being thing is easier than thing what is created from nothing. So, some people say that copying is mother of creation. In this regard, children are exposed better environment for creation. Today already achieves technological advance and growing creativity to better future is possible. Today, the technical improvement is already achieved, and the creation of the new technology is possible to make the better future. For example, invention of computer makes it possible to create various goods, such as monitor, keyboard and printer. Then people who need more convenience invent other wares. In this context, because there are many sources to copying and modifying, the technology helps children to create more things.
Besides, the advanced technology enables children to learn more knowledge easily. These days, children can access the information by using the improved technologies, such as the Internet, a PDP and a cell phone. When I think a new idea, I can immediately find the related information and record contents. It makes it possible to that I materialize the issue. Some people think that online information is not check by the government authorities for both the correctness and the validity. However, it is a task to do that people choose information reliably. There are many advantage of online information better than disadvantage of it. In this regard, Information by improvement of technology helps children to develop their idea.
To summarize, the technology makes children more creative. Above all, the technology improvement can affect the children's creativity today offer children more chance by possibility of creation. Second, it helps children to learn more information. These reasons indicate that For these reasons, children can develop their creativity by using the improved technology.
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