The advantages provided by English as a ‘global language’ will continue to outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree with the statement?
English has been become the default the first global language. Someone who speaks English can travel all over the world without experiencing any difficulties. English is also the language of business and science. Therefore, I agree with the argument that the merits contributed by English as a world language will continue to outweigh the drawbacks.
There are compelling benefits reasons to learn in English as a global language. 영어를 배우는 이유가 아니라 영어가 공용어로 쓰이는 것의 장점에 대해 논해야 하므로 '영어를 배우는 데 많은 이유가 있다'라고 설명하는 것은 논점에 맞지 않아요. The primary benefit is that English has been widely used for communication purpose ever since the days of imperialism. For instance, a tourist usually uses English for a plethora of purposes such as asking for directions, buying food and so on. In addition, English is the preferred language for conflict resolution around the world. Moreover, scientific education is mainly imparted in English. For example, almost all journal articles and conference papers are in English. Therefore, these merits vindicate the importance of the English language. 영어가 공용어로 사용되어서 어떤 점이 좋은지에 대해 논해야 하는데, 지금 문단 내용은 영어를 할 줄 알면 좋은 점으로 보일 수 있는 내용들이 섞여 있어서 논점이 불분명할 수 있어요. 영어가 공용어여서 좋은 점을 중점적으로 보여주세요.
However, there are some disadvantages to using English as a world language. First of all, it is not easy for non-native English learners to become fluent in reading, writing or speaking English. Furthermore, people in some countries find it learning English to be extremely difficult to learn English because of burgeoned differences in written expression. For example, each symbol is a word in the Chinese language, hence learning English may be an arduous task for the Chinese people. Consequently, people from non-English speaking nations have to learn English as a second language in addition to their native language. But none of these are valid excuses for not learning English because someone who speaks English has a clear advantage over someone who doesn’t speak English.
Having considered a range of arguments, I have drawn the conclusion that the merits provided by English as a global language outweigh the drawbacks. English is widely used for communication among people and even for conflict resolution. Scientific study is also conducted using the English language.
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global language가 '영어'인 것의 장점에 대해 논해야 하는데, 종종 영어를 배우면 좋은점이나 영어를 배울 때 왜 어려운지에 대한 설명으로 논점이 어긋날 수 있는 부분들이 보여 조금 아쉬웠어요. 공용어를 배우면 좋은 점이 아니라 '영어'가 공영어라서 좋은 점에 대해 제시할 수 있도록 논지를 발전시켜주시면 좀 더 쉬울 것 같아요. 수고 많으셨습니다~!
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