<Topic> The bar
charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a
three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the
city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting
the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. What are the best things
about living in London? What are the worst things about living in London?
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The two column charts and Overall, the
bar charts do not show the significant changes in the good order of the rate and
the people being for 3years in London are more like to tolerate to the three
main problems of the city compared to that of other residents. When it comes
to the best things about living in London The cost of
living is the hardest reason to live in London, interestingly, 1st
year residents answered were similar since the rates of cost of living, traffic
jam and crime illustrate mere differences, around 55%. (여기부터는 앞과는 약간 다른 내용이기 때문에 끊어가는 게 낫습니다.) As time went by, 40%
of 2nd and 3rd year Londoners said crime is the worst. It
is noteworthy that the ratios of mixture of people are approximately 30-35%, transport
are 30-25% in the best and worst things to live in London. As of the major
problem in London, people said litter issues are the most significant, moreover,
compared to the 1st year and the 3rd year portion (about
70%), 2nd year residents have 5% points more grievances. Air quality was considered the second-worst problem. While nearly 70% of 1st year Londoners
complained about this, that of 2nd year and 3rd year living residents
are similar (65%). The figure of noise indicates that people who were living their |
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multiple 차트는 시간이 절대적으로 부족한 것 같습니다.
마지막 체크도 못했고 생각나는대로 쓸 수 밖에 없었네요.
부족하지만 첨삭 부탁드립니다.
감사합니다.
총평: 일단 표가 그렇게 좋지는 못하기 때문에 점수는 일부러 뺐습니다. 이 표의 경우 꽁치님께서 해석한대로 1년차~3년차 주민들에 대한 설문이라고도 볼 수 있지만, 3개년에 걸친 설문이라고도 해석할 여지가 있는 등 질이 좋지는 않아요. 또한 실전에서 이정도로 정보가 많은 표를 출제하기는 쉽지는 않을 거니까 참고해주세요~
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