Your Answer ▼ The bar graph gives information about proportion of England's households throughout 1918 to 2011, comparing households with standard of whether it is owned or rented. (이 문장의 경우 다시 한번 작성해보시는 걸 추천드립니다. 지금과 같이 household 라는 표현이 불필요하게 두 번이나 쓰일 이유는 없기 때문이죠. 제가 고쳐드리는 건 금방이지만, 이보다는 heesoo님 만의 표현을 만들어가는 과정이 훨씬 중요해요. 모르시겠으면 언제든지 댓글 주세요!) It is clear that rate of households that were rented was by far the most dominant in 1918, at of almost 80%. However, the rate dipped of about 10% (percent 수치 간 산술적인 차이를 드러낼 때에는 percentage point 개념의 활용이 필요합니다.) in next two given years, before dropping significantly to just over 30% in 2001. Finally, it experienced a mild inclination about 5% (여기 역시 마찬가지이겠고요>) in the last period. On the other hand, the number share of people who owned their houses was only a minority in the first year given. There were increase of 10% (여기도 그렇겠죠.) in 1939, and has remained the same figure for the next given period. In addition, the proportion of owned houses climbed to 50%, which was the same rate with rented households in 1971 before reaching the peak of just below 70% . Due to a slight increase of the percentage of households in rented accomodations, the figure for that of owned houses dropped marginally in 2011. All in all, one can see downward trends in households that live in rented accommodation in the years between 1918 to 2011, whilst the inversed figures were found in the rates of owned houses.
*두 수치를 다 고려했을 땐 정점이 아니지만, 한 수치만 봤을 때 그 수치 안에서 정점에 달았을 때 reaching the peak이라고 표현해도 되나요 ? 감사합니다:)
A: 넵 충분히 가능합니다. 단 오해의 소지가 있을 경우도 충분히 존재하기 때문에 필요시 '그 수치 내에서' 임을 확실하게 해주시는 게 좋아요 :)
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