> > 2009-04-19 20:09:24, 'kristy' 님이 쓰신 글입니다. ↓
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Topic :제가 문제 리스트가 하나도 없는 관계로, 알고 있는 문제가 하나도 없네요. 라이팅 연습은 해야 하는데,,, 그래서 저기 151번 게시글 쓰신 분의 글과 같은 Topic 으로 해 보았습니다.
간단히, agency 를 통해 렌트해서 살고 있는데 heating system 이 고장이 났다. 전화를 해서 요청하였으나 아직도 고쳐지지 않았다. 그래서 이 Agency 에게 편지를 쓴다. 입니다.
시작은 Dear Sir/Madam 으로... 하라는 요청이 있습니다.
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최대한 공손하게 편지를 쓰는게 좋을것 같습니다 ^^
Dear Sir/Madam
편지를 받는사람은 morning이 아닐수도있으니까요; 대신 그냥 Hello와 함께 안부를 물으시는게 나을 것 같네요; Good Morning. 그리고나서 자기소개간단히;(예를들어, 몇번아파트,몇호에 산다..)
I am writing to tell(reinform) you the matter of broken heating system.that my apartment's heating system had been broken. I have been living a rent house through your agency.<<(앞에 내가 어디아파트 어디서 산다고 설명을 한다면 이문장은 필요없겠죠?) As I recognized our heating system broken, I tried to let your agency know this fact and let you help us out in any way. However, we are still in the same situation; we still find the broken heating system. >Better sentence: As you might realize, I have informed this problem to your agency about 10 days ago but I could not get any response nor repair for the heating system.
There might be many reasons why we still have broken heating system, like the staff who talked to us on the phone did not transfer this situation to proper person or albeit you already got the report, you did not try to do right action. (너무길고 포인트들이 다 섞여버린것 같네요 +grammar mistakes) >>always simplify!! >> I assume you could not solve this problem owing to[on account of] an unavoidable circumstances..
What I am thinking now is that you have to find any solution as soon as possible, as long time is already consumed; 1 week and few days more. >>this is rude;;대신<< I would appreciate if you could solve this problem as soon as possible.
As the weather is getting colder,(or winter is coming) we cannot stand without heating system. Plus,if you are not able to fix this heater right away, please consider another solutions such as a method that I can call other technician to fix the heater and you pay for it later. you can give us another solution instead of that you come and fix it by yourself; that could be the way- we can find any technical agency related to heating system, and you can pay for it later. If you agree with my idea, please let me attach the invoice soon. Anyway I hope I can get your reply with suitable solution. > I hope I can hear from you as soon as possible.
In advance thank you very much. (or I appreciate for your help/concern)
Best regard ( Sincerely)
Kristy | |
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