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The table below shows the percentage of consumer
expenditure by category from five countries in 2002.
Overall, Food/Drinks/Tobacco accounts for
the biggest proportions among the three categories between the five countries.
In contrast, the rate of Leisure/Education is followed by that.
Looking at the table more closely, the percentage
of Food/Drinks/Tobacco in Ireland and Turkey presents respectively 28.91%,
32.14%, which is almost doubled of Sweden’s percentage, with the lowest rate as
32.14%. In the case of Clothing/Footwear, the range of their percentage from 5
countries are from 5.40% to 6.63%, except for 9.00% that Italy has. As for Leisure/Education,
it indicates the lowest ratio between the three categories, and even it is almost 3
times of that of clothing/footwear in Ireland, 18 times of that of
Food/Drinks/Tobacco in Spain.
안녕하세요 선생님:) 행복한 주말 보내셨길 바랍니다. 이전 첨삭 내용을 참고하여, 비교와 대명사의 사용을 해보았습니다.
더불어, 이전 첨삭에서 task2가 더 중요하다고 말씀해주셨는데요~ 제가 라이팅에서 6.5를 받을 생각인데, 선생님께 받는 첨삭에서 task1,2의 점수가 6.6정도로만 받는 것을 유지한다면 실제 시험에서도 크게 무리는 없을가요ㅜㅜ? 일과 병행하다보니 실력이 늘지가 않아서 속상하네요,,ㅜㅜ 첨삭 감사드립니다!
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