Some people think that climate change could
have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change
could crate more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own
opinion.
People have different views about the effects of climate change. Some
people argue that extreme weather change might be a chance to attain a profit
in new business areas, while/and others say that it causes a negative effect to business.
In this essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and suggest my own view.
It
is true that the theory of climate change becomes a true story in people’s lives
as the environmental contamination is getting worse. As a result, many businesses
suffer from its the impact of it. One of the most noticeable parts is if tourism. Numerous
tourism facilities have been destroyed by the rise of the sea level and natural
disasters. For instance, in the Maldives, an/the (제가 지리쪽 전문가가 아니라 몰디브가 한 개의 섬인지 여러 개의 섬인지 모르겠네요ㅠㅠ둘 중 맞는 걸로 관사를 넣어주시면 됩니다.) island was submerged under the ocean and this led to the loss of people's jobs and even homes. leads people to lose their jobs and even homes, Meanwhile, farmers have trouble
with their works since they can not be able to grow crops. This is because the
rising temperature makes crops to become an unsuitable species in their habitats
and no longer to survive with harsh conditions.
However, some businesses have an opportunity
to achieve successful goals by results of the climate change. Companies which
have concentrated on the development of renewable energy are now one of the
most perspective enterprises. This is because renewable energy will replace the
usage of dominant resources by the change of people’s awareness about the negative
impact of fossil fuels. Furthermore, business relating to construction or real estate
also play an important role on the society which encountered the outcomes of climate
change. The behaviours of people who tend to escape from dangerous place and move
to the safe area enable these businesses to earn money.
In
conclusion, it is obvious that while the results of climate change have
negative impacts on certain businesses such as tourism or agriculture, I believe
that it will be a chance to enhance the success of other enterprises like the
development of renewable energy or the housing businesses and those industries make
people to protect people from the harmful effect of extreme weather condition and provide a the better life.
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