WRITING TASK 1
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You are planning a short visit to a city where one of your relatives lives.
Write a letter to your relative. In your letter:
• Explain when and how long you will be in town.
• Ask whether you can stay at their home.
• Offer to pay for yourself.
You do not need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ...,
You should write at least 150 words.
(바로 위에 논제에서 Dear ... 라고 시작하랬기 때문에, 그 말을 따를 수 있어야 합니다.)
Hi, Angela! How are you in Utah?
In Korea, the COVID 19 comes to have lower power seems to be weakening and people are starting to get back to get to start their original lives.
First of all, congratulations for your wedding! I'm so sad very sorry I wasn't able to not to attend your wedding.
When I see saw your wedding pictures, I can't couldn't believe how you and your husband match well.
And.. I have surprise for you! Guess what?
I'm going there for traveling as well as for congratulating going to Utah to travel as well as congratulate the wedding on July 8 with my boyfriend.
Please introduce your husband, I can't wait to see your sweet couples.
Do you remember staying at your house and watching movies all night last year?
These memories gave me inspiration of going back to Utah and meeting you.
By the way, do you mind for me and if my boyfriend and I stay at staying in your house?
I want to introduce your kindness and sweetness to for my boyfriend and make good memories again.
Also, I am worried that it is okay to stay in about staying in any hotels or hostels because of COVID 19.
News that hotel managers or guests booked there without noticing their symtoms are coming out.
We will stay for 5 days and leave to see the Grand Canyon.
As you know, I got my new job of teaching children in Korea.
So, I would like to give you some presents and money for my stay, since I got very valuable things from you last year.
Unless your couple get us in your house, please feel free to get my presents. (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요? 댓글 주시면 확인하고 수정해드리겠습니다.)
Although COVID 19 is getting worse in your town, please stay safe and never be defeated!
See you then, bye.
Your best friend, (논제를 보시면, 친척에게 쓰는 편지라고 되어있습니다. 물론, 친척도 친구가 될 수 있지 않냐라고 반박하실 수는 있겠지만, 애초에 이런 논란거리는 넣지 않는 게 좋아요.) Nicole.
총평: (6/4/6/5) 5.5
지금 가장 큰 문제는 문단 구분으로 보시면 됩니다. 현재 문장마다 죄다 엔터키가 쳐있는데, 이렇게 작성해서는 안 돼요. '문단이 구분될 때에 한해서' 엔터는 두 번 쳐주시고, 그 외의 경우는 무조건 엔터 없이 스페이스바로 이어주시면 됩니다. 다른 부분에도 문제가 없는 건 아니지만, 일단은 이게 제일 중요하므로 이것만 말씀드릴 거니까 꼭 여기부터 수정해주세요! 모범답안 등을 보시면 어떻게 나눠야하는지 금방 감을 잡으실 겁니다.
수고하셨습니다 :)