Some people think that it is beneficial to travel abroad, but others think it is unnecessary because we have the internet and TV. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. |
When people (이전 글에도 그랬는데, 제발 성공!!님의 경우 people 반복을 반드시 최소화해주셔야 합니다.) discuss going on a trip around the world, some people think that if people travel abroad, it will be helpful for them, however, others say that people do not have to go somewhere in the world because of TV and the Internet. Both views of the issue are intriguing, but I personally think that traveling overseas will be highly beneficial for many people.
Some proponents of traveling abroad insist that it is worth to try because people can experience the country's culture and make new friends. Many attractions in the world, now provide various kinds of activities such as trying to have traditional food or taking a picture with traditional costumes. In addition, many travelers are accommodated in hostels, so they usually meet many people who are from different countries and make a conversation while/by 등등 sharing their opinions. As a result, from these experiences, people can learn the history which the country has, broaden their minds, and gain the courage to try new things in the future.
On the other hand, others say that traveling overseas is not important in our lives thanks to TV and the Internet, and point out that it takes for a long time to make expenses that are needed for going on a trip, and it is quite tiring to look for some information involved in tourists' hotspots. In fact, a lot of people in various countries spend at least one year or two years to make some money to use for their trips even if they want to go abroad as soon as possible. Moreover, they cannot categorize which information is needed for the trips since there are a huge amount of sources to provide attractions' data. Therefore, people who hope for traveling in the world finally give up, and they just use TV, YouTube, the Internet, and so forth. (여기의 경우 unnecessary 와 그렇게 깔끔하게 떨어진다고 보기에는 조금 무리가 있습니다.)
In conclusion. trying, trying to go on a trip abroad is important for our lives. It is because it allows us (여기는 us, 뒤는 people 로 되어있어서 통일이 없는 상태이죠.) to learn new cultures and meet different people, and thereby people can have a wider perspective and be bold to give it a go in the future.
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