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<Topic> Some people think that a
sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that
children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful
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These days, many
people believe that competition is the most effective way to assess children’s
knowledge levels. However, some people consider that learning cooperation outweigh
competition. Although both viewpoints are valid, I would like to opine that cooperation
is more significant. On one hand, it
is a belief that competitions may motivate children in positive ways. Through the assessment in school, students are able to realize their academic levels
in the objective way and they can be encouraged to study more about their weaknesses.
In addition, there are some fields that competition is inevitable, for
instance, sports. Athletes should be evaluated by using their record since they
work hard to be the first winner among other athletes. Lastly, achieving high
score might help students to have better jobs in their future as advanced GCA
levels could be the strength in the recruitment. One the other
hand, I firmly believe that competition may occur other negative issues. For example,
students may commit the alternative way to achieve their own aim such as cheating.
It discourages other students who put in persistent efforts honestly. Furthermore,
sometimes the excessive competition conveys the tragedy and debacle in the students’
life as some children are depressed by being obsessed with their academic
score. It may also disturb their daily routine and sleep patterns to study harder
than other friends. According
to the above analysis, even though competitions bring benefits, I strongly think
that being cooperative teaches moral values and ethics to students. Therefore,
cooperation should be encouraged rather than the competition. |
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감사합니다.