There is a table representing a The table represents the total
number of student enrolments at three English language schools in 2017.
Overall, each of them shows a different trend as time passes; New Zealand Centre
for Languages(NZCL) and Best Communication English Academy(BCEA) reveal
increase of the number of student enrolments until a specific period before starting to decrease and starts
decreasing it, on the other hand, Mayfair School of English(MSE) shows an increase in has increased
its enrolments steadily.
The month when students enroll to NZCL the
most is July to August, in which there were 683 students which is 683, while in contrast the lowest month is January to
February, showing 314 students which is 314. Meanwhile, MSE has also the least student number in
January to February, but in the end they have 472 students in November to
December. When comparing Comparing three language schools, BCEA is the most popular school
among students until April, but from May students prefer NZCL the most to other
two schools.
In the beginning of 2017, BCEA seems to attract a lot of students, however, they lose the preference among students. The notable thing is that MSE seems to make a steady effort to lure students. In fact, the continuous increase of the student enrolments proves it. (task 1에서는 이와 같은 임의의 해석을 하는 게 아니라, 있는 사실 자체에만 집중해주시면 됩니다. 여기의 경우도 이 내용 대신 학교 간 학생 격차가 벌어지고 좁혀지는 것 등에 대해서만 다뤄주시면 돼요.)
총평: (6/7/7/7) 7.0
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