▶ Your Answer : The graph >> 문제와 단어 같은거 하면 안 됩니다 chart illustrates >> 무조건 미래든 과거든 여긴 다 현재 시제로 작성합니다 설명하고 있단 사실 자체를 말하는거니까요 price changes of books difference of price in four different categories in Australia between 1990 to and 1993.
At the first glance, it can be clearly seen that every price of books was rise during 3years period. >> 이건 오버뷰입니다 text books of professional, children’s, and school text books were value worth of 20, 15, and 10 dollars for each at the year of 1990. They increased equally about 3 dollars in the next year after a year. However, since then, they showed different prospectives since then. Firstly, >> 문두 부사 뒤에 콤마 넣어주세요 the price of children’s books levelled out. After that, and professional one was rose to 30 dollars until 1992 and then it remained steady. Lastly, >> 문두 부사 뒤 콤마입니다 school text books price >> school text books price 명사가 네개가 나란히 왔네요 불가능합니다 text books' price of school was fluctuated over two years>> when? and ended up with 18 dollars. Price of scientific books' value appeared a dramatic rise at the last year by about 20 dollars, so that conclude with 40 dollars.>> by 가 얼마만큼 증가했단걸 보여주는 전치사입니다 전치사가 없으면 완전히 의미가 달라집니다
단락별 문장 첫 시작에 들여쓰기 해주세요 글자수가 약 20자 정도 부족합니다 글자수 충족이 우선이구요 문법이나 단어, 전치사, 품사 등 봐주시길 바랍니다 또한 오버뷰는 본론에 속합니다 결론 썼으면 글자수는 충족 됐겠네요
Task Achievement - 4 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 6 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 5
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