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The line graph illustrates that the amount number of people who smoked by each gender in the time period between 1960 and 2000 in Someland.
The most noticeable fact is that a substantial number of men had smoked, which were approximately 600 per 1000 people. However, it is interesting to note that the number of men the figure for men had fallen to almost 250 thousand people in 2000.
When it comes to females, in 1960, under 100 thousand female smoked and it the figure for women (주어 설정 주의, it은 무엇? 구체적으로 서술해주세요) gradually started to rise to 2000 thousand in 1965, remaininged steadily until 1970. In addition, from 1970 to 1975 there was a significant increase in the smoking female proportion of smoking females, which was recorded as the largest number of female, with over 300 thousand. After this period, it started to decline slowly to 200 thousand numbers of women in 2000.
By analyzing the data, we can conclude that the gap between men and women has shown a considerable difference, accounting for the highest number of people by men ???. However, as time goes by, this gap had become narrow, finally shown a similar number of people by each sex in 2000.
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