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The line graph chart >> graph->chart chart->graph로 절대 문제랑 같이 쓰지 마세요 그거 하나라도 바꿔서 문제에서 최대한 페러프레이즈 했단걸 보여주는겁니다 illustrates the figures for spending energy,>> 콤마 빼주세요 in the USA over the period of for five decades, starting from the year of 1980 and gives a prediction to 2030.
At first glance, petrol and oil were the major resources of fuel, rising from about 35 quadrillion units in 1980 to 42 quadrillion in 2014. Despite some fluctuations between 1980 and 1995, there was a steady increase, which is expected to continue and reach around 50 quadrillion >> 오버뷰에는 이렇게 수치가 들어가지 않습니다 in 2030.
Consumption of energy from natural gas and coal followed a similar pattern over the period >> from when to when?. From 20 quadrillion and 15 quadrillion respectively in 1980, the figures for both energies have fluctuated for after the following 35 years. However, coal consumption is predicted to rise to more than 30 quadrillion in 2030, whereas, after 2014, natural gas spending is forecasted to level off at around 25 quadrillion.
In 1980, the used amount of energy from solar/wind, nuclear, and hydropower was the least-used, with only under 5 quadrillion. Since 2005, the use of hydropower has fallen fell back to the 1980 figure and . In contrast, it is expected to remain approximately constant throughout the year 2030, while the others are predicted to rise gradually after 2025.>> 길어서 끊어드렸습니다
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task 1 에 결론을 쓰지 않아도 되는지 잘 모르겠습니다 ㅠㅠㅠ line graph는 쉬울줄 알았는데 어렵네요 ㅠㅠㅠ
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결론은 쓰는게 좋습니다 보시면 오버뷰 디테일 형태를 오버뷰를 몰아서 쓰지 않고 본론 두개 구성해서 본론1 오버뷰+디테일 본론2 오버뷰+디테일의 형태로 쓰셨네요 결론을 쓰는게 낫겠구요 뭘 비교하는게 없습니다 단순 나열들이고 뭐 특이하다 특별하다라고 할 특징도 제시한 것처럼 보이지 않네요 가장 높은건 뭐고 그게 언제고 몇인지 등에 대해서요 보자마자 10초만에 해석될 정도로 간단하게 바로 보일 내용들에 대해 작성하셔야 합니다 문단은 서론 본론 결론 3 단락으로만 구성해도 충분합니다 쉬운 단어, 반복적인 단어, 쉬운 문장구조 등으로만 작성되어서 지루한 감이 있고 글에 생기가 없는 것처럼 심심하게 됐습니다
Task Achievement - 5 Coherence and Cohesion - 6 Lexical Resource - 5 Grammatical Range and Accuracy - 6
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