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In last several decades, we have explored space. In that process, even though our world improved so much in various ways, some people say that money spent on this exploration is a complete waste, and insist that money have to be expended on more emergent parts, such as orphans or the third world.
Basically, we have explored the space due to satisfaction of our curiosity. We have questioned where the space came from and how big it is. That is why many scientists and physicists were enthusiastic to study and invest on space. In that process, actually, we have seen great developments in various areas, (comma) such as vehicle technology, IT, physics, mathematics, even foods. As a consequence, people became to indulge more comfortable life and know about space more.
However, some people argue that the money spent on space exploration is so overpriced and that money should be spentd on helping the poor or the third world. In some cases, People people (대/소문자 주의) who are suffering from severe poverty, especially in the third world, are starving seriously and even die. They are really needed to be helped (수동태가 쓰여져야 할 때만 사용합니다, 문장을 길게 쓰기 위해 혹은 다른 이유로 불필요한 곳에 무분별 사용 x, 문장이 깔끔하지 못하게 합니다) by developed contries which is are spending excessive money on space exploration. Besides, many scientists have basically explored space due to (due to 뒤에 명사 형태입니다) just to know more about it. They should recognise how many people are dying by from starving.
In conclusion, even though we have improved 무엇을? 목적어 없습니다 in various ways by space exploration, the money spent on this is so excessive, and that money should be used to more needed places, such as helping the poor and the third world.
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