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There are different opinions about talent. Some people assert that inborn talent is important to become a (단/복수 주의) artists or athletes. On the other hand, other people believe that anyone people can achieve those goals by learning teaching. In this essay, I will outline these views and offer my opinion.
Some people claim that natural gifts are the (최상급) most influential facts of one’s achievement. They believe that it is not important whether someone is educated by good teachers or not. This is because a person who is taught music and sport cannot overcome 무엇을? 목적어가 없습니다 For example, in a famous swimming poor ?무슨의미입니까? pool?, lecturer says that “I saw a lot of students who started to learn swimming. Sometimes, I can meet some students who can learn swimming faster than others. I believe they have talents.”
On the other hand, other people say that all the people can learn to be artists and athletes. They believe that there is no inherited difference in ability between people. They explain the only difference of ability result from the amount of effort that person put did. For instance, AA is one of the top musicians in Korea. She was not good at singing and dancing when she was young. However, she learned and practices it hardly than other people, for several years and she (주어!) did not give up her dream. In nNow days, she is very well known by her ability. This example supports the idea of people who believe teaching is more important.
There is a different opinion on talent. In my opinion, some people have talent with birth luckily. However, (comma) talent also can be made by teaching and effort.
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