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As society is changing into the modernisation, many household life (?무슨 의미의 단어 인가요? many 다음 복수형태 주의 혹은 many를 제외하고 되를 becomes로 서술) become more convenient than ever before. In this situation, some argue that parents can ask their children to do a household chore, while Others other (대/소문자 주의, 고유명사처럼 특별한 경우가 아닌 경우 문장의 중간에 대문자가 오지 않습니다) think doing a household is a parents' (부모들'의') duty. Nonetheless, in my opiniion, parents can give children a domestic tasks for several reasons.
First of all, doing a housework can build a sense of common ? between children and parents. In particular, children recentily are so busy that and they can not cannot (붙여서 사용, 여기선 cannot보다는 do not이 더 적절한 표현입니다, 한국식 표현 주의) have a time with their parents. Moreover, they tend to have a time only for themselves. So, these things can be a causation result of the individualisation. However, as children takeing a domestic task with their parents, they have an opportunity to realize and failiarize familiarize?스펠링 주의 each other. It also makes a bond in the family. In this regard, conducting the household chores is beneficial for children.
On top of that, parents can lead a children how to manage their time effectively. For example, children generally spend their time as for watching TV, playing games, and spending their time with their friends. For this reason, they sometimes confuse what kind of things are important of for them. It also causes a waste of their times. But, parents give a household chores to their children can prevent for those situations. Therefore, I consider children should help their parents to do a household chores.
To sum up, it is sure that children take a household chore as replace patents ?? is very irritate things for them. Otherwise ?? , it can be a good experience that children can not cannot acquired anywhere elsewhere. So, (Comma) i I (대/소문자 주의) agree that parents can ask their children to do a household chores.
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Comment: 내용이나 전반적인 흐름은 괜찮으나 Too many grammatical mistakes! + 스펠링/어색한 표현이 너무 많습니다. |