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Some people argue to help that (도와주는 게 들어가면 문제가 아닙니다. 문제를 해결하는 것이죠.) endangered species of animals and plants is the most important environmental problem, but others insist that there must be other more urgent and important ones nowadays. I belives that conservation of animals and plants is certainly important, but there are more essential and urgent problems today. It is true that to conserve endangered animals and plants is important, becuase their crisis can be humans' one as a member of ecosystem (~로 이어질 위험이 있다~라고 적어주시면 좋을 것 같습니다.). The ecosystem is linked closely to all creatures on Earth, and if some part is damaged, the entire system whole of it can be damaged as well. Particularly, the status of endangered species can indicate the level of the danger which humans will face soon. For example, the efforts to preserve polar bears can be closely linked to fighting against global warming and keeping the space for all creatures including humans on Earth in the long run. (해결까지는 너무 나갔습니다. 그냥 '왜' 심한 문제인지에 대해서만 집중해주시면 돼요.)
On the other hands, there are many more urgent and critical environmental problems around human beings. Among many problems, I belive how to reduce and recycle (여기도 서론과 마찬가지로, 쓰레기의 재활용은 문제가 아닙니다. 쓰레기 자체가 문제인 것이죠.) waste is the most important problems that all countries in the world have to solve immediately. After the Industrial Revolution, people have has consumped too much amount of natural resources and produced enormous amount of waste as well, and for the result, environmental problems such as global warming and the deteriorating of ecosystem are caused significantly nowadays. Moreover, the most critical fact is that the rate of recycling waste in most of the governments are still very low, and on top of that, they do not take this problem very seriously and only bury they just still take this problem not that serious, as only burying them into the earth.
In conclusion, to conserve endangered species of plants and animals is very important, but I believe the waste problem, which is causing other relevant fundamental environmental problems is the most urgent and critical problem today.
*분량도 약간 조절 못하고, 스펠링 검사하면 45분 정도 사용했습니다. (실전에서는 꼭 조절해주셔야 합니다! 실전 적응은 제가 어떻게 도와드릴 수 있는 사항이 절대 아니라...) |