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It is obvious that fossil fuels are a dominant material to produce electricity the
electric and products. However, as awareness about environment has increased, many
countries try to develop the renewable energy. I opine that development of new energy
has a both a positive and negative effect at the same time.
Firstly, clean energy such as solar energy, tidal energy or wind energy (참고로 말씀드리면, 여기서 첫 두 energy 는 생략 가능하고 그냥 solar, tidal~ 로 적는 게 낫습니다.) is relatively inefficient compared to the fossil fuels. This is because outcomes
of renewable energy rely on the geographical characteristics or weather. For instance,
the tidal energy is not suitable to build in certain areas where tide does not exist tidal is not existed
at all. Furthermore, the outcome of green energy might not be enough to cope with the
current consumption level. In addition, to build new facilities for alternative
energy, the government should spend huge money and it leads to a burden of government.
However, the clean energy is a sustainable every in contrast with fossil
fuels. Fossil fuels will become deplete (deplete 는 따로 암기해두시면 도움이 될 겁니다.) extinct someday by the thoughtless consumption and people
might not be available to use it because of the increased price. Unlike fossil fuels,
new energy is immortal energy and people can use it repeatably. Moreover, the government
can create new job opportunities by developing new energy resources. The development
of new power plants triggers the construction of infrastructure such as roads or
large-scale electric grids which need many workers. Therefore, it is a good method
to solve the unemployment problem and increase income of individuals.
In conclusion, while the development of new energy has drawbacks in some soem degree, I believe that new energy projects is a key to increasing increase employment and survival rates
and survive in the future.
답안을 작성하기까지 시간이 오래 걸리는 편(45분-50분)입니다.... 혹시 작성 시간을 줄이는 방법이 있을까요.....?
흠...시간 단축은 사실 저보다는 같은 수험생분들이 어떻게 줄이셨는지 여쭤보는 게 좋을 것 같습니다ㅠㅠ제가 드릴 수 있는 말씀은 그냥 단번에 줄이려고 하지 말고, 3분/5분씩 순차적으로 줄여나가는 연습을 해서 최종적으로 35분까지 줄이는 게 좋다~정도밖에 없을 것 같네요...(35분인 이유는, 남는 5분은 검토 시간이며 연습 때 35분에 맞춰야 실전에서 40분 정도로 조절이 되기 때문입니다.)
그리고 지금 글이 40분 내로 작성되지 않았다면, 실전에서는 제가 드리는 점수 대비 0.5점 정도는 까고 가셔야 해요! 수고하셨습니다 :)
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