■ Direction Read the question below. You have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically, an effective response will contain a minimum of 300 words. ■ Question Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Use specific reason and examples to support your answer | |
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▶ Topic : Some people think that planning for future is a wast of time, it is more important to focus on the present
To what extend do your agree or disagree with this statement? | |
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▶ Your Answer :
The argument making a plan for future has been questioned by many people. While some people claim that planning in the ruture is a waste time, I believe that making is helpful to encourage their achivement and reach a goal what they want. This essay will be discussed about advantages and disadvantages in this phenomenon.
It is undeniable that future cannot be controlled by manpower. We always plan for future, but it might go different way that as we unpredicted. Because people could stuck with money, gender and age problem. This issues cannot be managed by people. Also our prediction might be changed later by our mind and situation. So changieable plan do not have to repeat.(??)
On the other hand, I strongly assert that making a plan is more important to develop achivement and our mind. For example, in my experience, I usually predict before task and goal. It is really beneficial to sayve money and get some advice from many experienced people. After that, I could always reach my dream and more quickly than other people.
A Blue print helps me how to go and where i am. In addition, there are unpredictable situation in the future. Nevertheless many people could enhance themselve throughout their effort before. If we did not make plan before, we did not have to do something. Therefore, planning nothing leads to wast time and money. Because, we will lost way where we go.
To sum up, although spending time to plan before we start thends to go slowly, I assert that we could achive dream faster after making a plan. | |
It is difficult to find the main arguments in this answer. There are quite a lot of mistakes in word form, word choice or spelling, which cause problems for the reader. The response is organised into sections, which is not logical also the relationship between ideas is not always clear and the linking expressions are sometimes inaccurate. It dealt with not many ideas.
Therefore, I believe that this answer will be achieved a band 4 score.