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People have different views about the obligation of packaging. Some
people argue that manufacturers have a duty to reduce the amount of materials used
in packaging. However, others say said that the responsibility to decline the useless
package is belongs to customers. In this essay, I will discuss both opinions and
give my own one.
On
the one hand, a number of companies tend to use packaging as a marketing strategy.
Packaging of product is a powerful method to advertise a product and
distinguish it from other products. By using various packaging materials, such
as plastic bags or boxes with bright colors, companies make their products as an
outstanding item and attract people. Meanwhile, supermarkets encourage customers
to use it to use plastic bags which are is hard to recycle, when they buy a fresh
fruit or vegetable, even though they do not want to use a plastic bag. (이 문단은 마켓 쪽에 책임이 있다! 라는 점을 훨씬 직접적으로 드러내주셔야 합니다. 지금과 같이 초반부에서 패키징의 장점을 강조할 필요는 전혀 없고요. 물론 이 문단 통해 열심히 추론하면 충분히 마켓 쪽의 책임을 이끌어낼 수 있긴 합니다. 그러나 글의 작성자로써 독자에게 이렇게 추론을 맡기는 것은 좋지 못합니다. 문학작품이면 몰라도, 비문학에서는 내가 제시하고자 하는 바를 명확하게 드러낼 수 있어야 해요. 특히 채점관들에게 추론을 맡기는 것은 점수에 있어 거의 자살행위에 가까우므로 더더욱 주의해주셔야 합니다.)
On
the other hand, it is obvious that many people prefer to buy small scale products
recently and manufacturers reflect this trend to their packaging strategies.
The amount of packaging increased according to the increase (increase 가 연속해서 쓰이고 있으므로 가급적이면 둘 중 하나는 대체해주세요!) of one-person household
and nuclear family. For instance, one-person household is preferable to deliver
food instead of cooking themselves. In addition, the wise use of courier service
is also one of the reasons to promote the excessive packaging. Given this phenomenon,
if customers pursue environmentally friendly packaging or attempt to buy less
decorated goods, companies reform their packaging strategy to cope with the reduced
demand about package. (본론 첫 번째 문단도 최소 이 정도의 직접성은 갖춰야 합니다. 참고로 최'소' 입니다.)
In
conclusion, the responsibility about excessive packaging is now one of the most
conversational issues that people like to debate. While companies tend to use
packaging to attract people’s attention, I believe that the preference of customers
caused by the change of family form triggers the excessive packaging.
Therefore, customers have a duty to reduce packaging by purchasing a product with which is less decorated. |