Drug abuse is an increasing problem in modern times.
Discuss some reasons behind this and suggest ways it can be hindered.
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It is true that the abuse of illegal drugs has become a critical issue in contemporary society. While this is a serious problem, it can be solved by strengthening the control and law.
The main cause of the rising drug crime is that there are a vast amount of illegal material about drugs on the Internet. In modern society, with the development of the Internet, many people can find data related drugs and get illegal drugs such as ecstasy, phylophone or weeds. Also, the level of punishment for drug crimes is too low. In Korea, for example, if someone wants to get drugs, he or she go to a site where they can link drug data to sellers by searching the Internet. In addition, if caught in a crime, they will be released on a fine or probation.
However, there are solution to this problem. One of the ways to prevent abusing drugs is the Internet crackdown and strengthening of the law. the government should establish a control department and the ministry of justice enacts or revise laws that offenders who commit a drug crime can go to jail over 5 years or get worse, demand the death penalty. In Saudi Arabia, for instance, if some people do a drug offence, the judge rules the death penalty and the government also has their own the Internet security team who are monitoring and blocking the bad or illegal material included drugs around the clock. In the above actions, their drug crime rate is significantly lower compared to other countries.
To sum up, it is clear that easily accessing the drug data and low punishment level is a big reason behind the increasing number of abuse cases. Nevertheless, the issue can be resolved by controlling the cyber environment and enforcement of low by the government.
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