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There is an opinion that people who committed a crime should be imprisoned, whereas others think that there are alternative measures as a punishment. In my view, both arguements are correct but it should be applied to different levels of crimes in a proper way.
There is no doubt that criminals should be sent to a prison and be punished. The first reason is that offenders should be away from the victims. The victims will be very scared of their revenge so that the criminals should be locked in a prison to prevent a second crime. Secondly, Imprisonment will show the crimes will not be tolerated and punished for sure. This will help to deter other crimes. Finally, there is not a better way to punish the criminal other than imprisonment as criminals culprits >> 좀 더 어휘를 다양하게 하려고 썼어요 should feel fear and pain as they did to the victims.
However, some people argue that the imprisonment is not the best way to punish the criminals. That is because putting the criminals together in a prison is not good and may cause other problems after that they became friends and do the bad things together when they are released. Moreover, criminals should do something for the society such as community service works ,when not just locked in a prison and do nothing. Furthermore, it is unfair that taxes are being used for accommodation and food for offenders.
In my opinion, criminals should be sent to a prison for the above reasons but the law should be flexible. All crimes are bad but some of them are minor. If we sent all criminals to a prison, it might >> if절의 동사가 과거라면 주절의 조동사도 과거형이어야 합니다 increase more criminals at the end. Therefore, I suggest applying a rehabilitation program plan for minor offenders or imposing a fine for the minor one to prevent a crime other than lock up all the criminals together in a prison.
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