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It is claimed by some that the governments should spend a massive amount of money on building new railway lines in order to connect cities by very fast trains. However, there are others who think that spending the money on developing already existing public transport is more necessary. Although improving the existing one is important, I totally agree with those who believe a new fast one is necessary. There are various reasons why it might be considered beneficial to improve the existing public transportation. First, it is more economical to the country in terms of tax. If the government invest a large amount of money, which comes from tax, it would be a huge burden to the country as well as citizens. This is because citizens may need to pay more tax to that vast constructions and there would be no spare money for well-fare which is really necessary to people. Nonetheless, I believe that it is a better choice to invest a lot of money in to constructing new railways. This would be better as a long-term plan to develop the country. There would be no big difference even if existing public transports are improved when it comes to speed. New very fast trains would provide citizen with a next level of convenience convenient and life quality of life, because by using fastest transport, they do not need to waste their time while commuting and moving move into a city for a workplace or school. It would relieve the problem of city centralized situation. In conclusion, I totally agree with those who argue that it is necessary for governments to spend big money on building new railways for the reasons I mentioned above.
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