Academic Task1 : Smoking Rate in Gold Island

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     The graph explanes the men's and women's rate per thousand

of smoking between 1960 and 1985. It had a gradual decrease for

men, and initially an increase, no change in the middle, but finally

a decrease for women.

     It can be easily understood from the illustration that male's

 smoking rate was fairly reduced by 200 , which is from 500 in

1960 to 300 in 1985 over the whole period. But the rate for femail

started at 100 in 1960, steadily rose well under 150 in 1970, and

sharply boomed up to 300 in 1975. The 300 remained being

leveled off for the next five years until 1980. Both the men's and

women's rate had the same figure at 300 in 1980, and began to

fall and had dropped to around 250 in 1985.

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