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In period of growth, children are affected by many environments and education which surround them. For that reason, governments encourage all children to study in school at a certain age under compulsion. However, I believe that parents have more influence on children's life than school, because children usually spend long time with their family.
Needless to say, school is a important place for students. They obtain a number of knowledge and cultivate their mind and body from many kinds of classes. Through the relationship with other people - friends and teachers -, they are aware of what kind of things are happened in some social groups. Besides, by leaning lots of subjects, children will realize themselves what they like and what makes them happy, and it can leads to have a dream for their future path.
It is an undeniable fact that school can offer lots of knowledge and training, but they have less supports to build children's personality than their parents. The personality is the most crucial factor to be a good social member. Since children are born, they live with their family for a long time. Through the time, a character of children will build up such as their parent's behaviors, thinking, and guidance. Parents can teach things that how to politely react polite when they meet an old person, and how can deal with problems when they face difficulties. Children can rarely gain these valuable information from school.
It is obvious true that school and family have impacts on children's growth. In my opinion, however, the role of parents is more weighty than school because they influence directly upon a formation of personality of children. A good personality helps them to be a necessary member of society.
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