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Recently, there is a pressing issue
concerning a substantial amount of rubbish in the world. In this essay, I will
discuss two reasons for this problem and also sugget two solutions.
Many
experts point out that a consumer culture and disposal products have played an
important role in increasing a large amount of trash. In order to maximize
their profits, a number of corporations have tempted people to buy new goods.
It has made consumers buy numerous products, even though they are not in need
of. In addition, the invention of disposal products is a significant factor of a
lot of rubbish. A variety of disposal products have been used because they are
convenient for consumers. This is because they do not have to be wash or cleaned
them after being (원래 저 앞의 They 는 소비자를 의도하고 작성하셨겠지만 저는 제품 자체를 중점으로 놓고 전개하는 것이 더 자연스럽다고 생각해서 수정해드렸습니다.) they used them.
However, I believe that governments can deal
with this problem by introducing some regulations and incentive policies.
Firstly, governments could conduct a regulation that can limit the amount of
goods that companies can produce. By monitoring and imposing taxes on the
excessive production of companies, they would effectively manage the amount of
rubbish. Besides, incentive policies organized and conducted by governments
would have positive effects on the issue. The incentives would encourage
corporations to develop eco-friendly items instead of disposal ones, leading to
a decrease in the amount of amount of trash.
In
conclution, I think that an consumer culture and the widespread use of disposal
goods are the main reasons for the problem of too much amount of rubbish. I
think (바로 앞에 같은 표현이 있으니까 가급적이면 수정해주세요!) that governments would cope with this serious issue by introducing
regulations and incentive polices related to the production of goods.
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