The charts show the proportion of British students who were able to speak languages other than English in 2000 and 2010.
Overall, what stands out from the charts is that the largest number of students who could speak different languages were included in Spanish only. It is also noticeable that there were increased students who were able to speak languages that are not French, German, and Spanish. (이 내용의 경우 세부 분석에 더 어울립니다. 이 표의 Overview에서는, '10년의 기간동안 최소 한 개 이상의 외국어를 할 수 있는 학생의 비율이 증가했다~' 라고 적어주시면 돼요.)
Focusing on the biggest portion of languages, students who knew Spanish remained as a majority (여기는 링크를 하나 넣어드리겠습니다.). And (문장을 and but so로 시작하는 것은 좋지 못합니다.), it increased from 30% to 35% over 10 years. It constitutes over one-third of all students. Additionally, no other language, which had the second-highest proportion form the chart in 2000, became the lowest part in 2010 at 10%, the same figure as French only and two other languages.
Looking at another language and two other languages, they rose 5
percentage points from 15% and 10% to 20% and 15%, respectively. As these parts get became larger, students who were not able to
speak any other language decreased from 20% to 10%.
총평: (7/6/7/6) 6.5
사실 이 글의 정석 구성은 서론-오버뷰(제가 위에 적어드린 내용으로)-2000-2010의 네 문단이긴 합니다. 그러나 지금처럼 쓴다고 해서 절대 틀린 건 아니므로 크게 상관은 없고요. (단, 오버뷰 내용 자체는 웬만하면 제가 적어드린대로 가는 게 좋습니다. 그래야 짧고 간결하면서도 표를 폭넓게 포괄할 수 있어요.)
수고하셨습니다 :)