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The bar chart >> graph 문제에서 chart로 나오면 graph 그 반대면 또 적용하시구요 diagram이라면 figure라고 해주세요 illustrates the total number of minuets of telephone calls in the UK between 1995 and 2002 >> 완전한 표절입니다 고득점은 어렵습니다.
There are three types of calls shown, which are fixed line local calls, fixed line national and international calls and all mobile calls. >> 이 부분은 서론에 적합하긴 하지만 따로 이렇게 문장을 내서 언급하지 않고 괄호로 넣거나 할 수 있습니다 Overall, the most frequently used type of calls in the given period was local calls using landlines and the least one was mobile calls. Over the period shown, the number of minutes of mobile calls grew fastest.>> 오버뷰는 본론입니다
In 1995, the number of minutes of fixed line local calls was highest among the three categories,>> 콤마 빼주세요 at around 70 billions. The number of minutes of fixed line national and international calls took up the second largest proportion of the total UK telephone calls,>> 콤마 빼주세요 at around 35 billions, while the figures for mobile calls was only around 2 billions.
Between 1995 and 1999, the number of minutes of all the three categories of calls has gradually increased gradually >> 동사 뒤에 부사입니다 by around 90 billions, 45 billions , >> 3개 이상 나열에서 마지막엔 콤마 붙입니다 and 10 billions respectively. However, between 1999 and 2002, the number of UK citizens who have used mobile phones have rose quickly by almost 40 billions,>> 40 billion 만큼 증가한 것 맞나요? by면 얼마만큼 to는 얼마까지의 차이점이 있습니다 in contrast with the number of local land line users who have fell by around 70 billions. Only the number of national and international fixed line users have increased steadily over the total period.
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billions 는 수십억이라는 뜻입니다 숫자가 붙어서 자세한 수를 표현하고자 할 땐 s 가 붙지 않습니다
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