▶ Your Answer :
Because of the trends that people recently eat a meal for a comfotable convenient method, many traditional food are changing into the fast food. For this reason, some considers that it will be treat the nation not only the part of health but also the identification ??이해 안되는 문장. So, in my opinion, it would haves a problem to both individuality and society.
In the view of the individial, there are some problems that caused by the fast food.
First of all, it may be the course ?? of impatience for the people who eat a fast-food regularly. Because, (<-no comma/ because가 되어야합니다/becasue S+V의 형태는 incomplete sentence! S+V because S+V. 혹은 Because S+V, S+V.) they have a difficultiy to eat a slow food for their impatience. As they avoid the slow food, they can be it can cause a lack of nutrition for need our body. Consequentiy, they have a disease from the phenomenon which a lack of nessery necessary nutrition in one's health. In this regard, the advent of fast-food as people's meal is harmful not only physically but also psychologically.
In addition, as traditional food change into the fast food, this situation also can cause the harmful effects by society. Especially, someone to who starts to eat a fast-food from the children has a capability to decrease 어색한 단어 선택 their health. If this circumstance is continued to the adult, they could lose their ability to maintain a normal life. As a consequense, it eaffectsed the nation's development due to losing the healthy working adults economically active popluation. On top of that, it also causes the lose of the identification by the westernization of food. More severe aspect is that many youth young people do not have a knowledge of the tradtional food. Therefore, to preserve the identification of food by from the fast food also one of the significant points to consider.
As a result, to eat a meal more conveniently, many people prefer to eat a fast food rather then than a traditional food. But, prior to the eating meal, considering the one's health and identification fo of their nationality is an inevitable part to the meal.
SCORE: 4.5
Comment: 코멘트는 항상 같습니다. 문법 실수가 너무 많기 때문에 글을 계속 무작정 써나가기 보다는 기본적 문법 공부에 충실해주세요. |