Your Answer ▼ The bar graphs illustrate how to use land area on different purpose in five cities, Brisbane, Sydney, Melbourne, Adelaide, Perth based on Australia. Overall, among three types of land usage purpose, the amount of residential land is charged in the largest part on this whole graph below, while the commercial land is shown the smallest part on the graph. In addition, the greatest gaps among this different types of land usage are shown my Brisbane and Perth. In detail, Perth is indicated by the largest amount of land usage for recreation by 45%, while the smallest of those in Adelaide by 25%. the gap of these percentage point is the lowest by 20%. Secondary, the amount of residential land illustrate the largest proportion in overall graphs especially in Brisbane and Perth by 60% and 50% respectively. In this case, Melbourne has the smallest amount of using land by 30% which is smaller than one and half (1/2) by Brisbane. Finally, In using commercial land, the above pattern is shown up side down which mean Brisbane and Perth are charged in the smallest part through same proportion by 10%, on the other hand Melbourne is charged in the largest part by 35%.
이번주 첨삭+라이팅팁 링크 주신걸로 제가 얼마나 부족한지 깨닫게 되었습니다.. (테스크 2는 완전히 이해를 잘못하고 있었더라구요..) 근데 바차트가 원래 다른것 보다 더 어려운걸까요? ㅠㅠ 처음 풀어봤는데 1)계속 같은 표현을 사용하게 되는 것과 2)largest / highest 구분이 잘안되고,,흑흑,, 3)overviwe를 언급할때 제시된 도시에 중점을 맞춰야 하는지 (예를 들어 모든 목적에 있어서 가장 많은 비율을 차지하는 것은 퍼스다) 지금처럼 3가지 분류로 나눠진 목적들에 초점을 맞춰야하는지도 확신이 안섰습니다 ㅜㅜ 그래도 링크 첨부해주신거 정독하면서 나열보다는 비교대조를 써보려고 노력은 하긴 했는데..ㅠㅠ하아.. 열심히는 하는데 라이팅이 정말 답이 없어서 속상한 마음에 질문을 많이 추가한 것 같아요 ㅠㅠ.. 항상 바로잡아주셔서 감사합니다 더 열심히해서 꼭꼭꼭 6.0으로 만들게요 ㅠ_ㅠ! |