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With the development of society, students can get a variety of sources
about information from a variety of sources, so some people think that the role of teachers has become diminished.
However, I do not agree with this perspective.
The most significant factor that people should consider is that teachers
have played a wider role now than they had in the past. Even though students have received
some knowledge through various media, this information would be wrong and
futile sometimes. In this situation, teachers have had acted on their real
guide for not only students’ education, but also their life. Many students
have had certain goals in mind while having uncertainty whether it is in line
with the future or not. Because their parents have been always busy to at work,
students need to get specific advice from teachers who are the closest adult in
students’ life. That is the reason why many teachers have already become a
mentor for their students. (문단 전반적으로 현재완료보다는 현재 쪽의 사용이 낫지 않을까 싶네요. 물론 현재완료도 틀린 건 아니라 저도 따로 수정하지는 않았습니다.)
Another salient part is that teachers can benefit students’ health
issues. It is true that most adolescents tend to trust the peer group more than
their parents, thus the bond between parents and children would worsen. Apart
from parents (이 표현을 넣으면, 선생님과 더불어 부모님의 역할도 어느정도 강조하는 문맥이 나오는데, 바로 앞 문장에서는 부모님 쪽을 부정하고 있기 때문에 서로 충돌하는듯 하네요. 저는 이렇게 받아들였는데, 실제 의도하신 바는 다를 수도 있으니 필요시 댓글 주세요~), teachers are only the ones who can help children to maintain
their physical and mental health. In reality, teachers have suggested easy
working out with children (여기는 어떤 의미로 적어주셨나요?), and they have tried to be interested in students’
mental status. Through these attempts, students can decrease their
psychological issues like depression, frustration or anxiety, all of which are
originated from severe pressure about study, and they can be healthier.
In conclusion, I think that despite many kinds of information sources,
students are still required for teachers (주체가 서로 뒤바뀌었는데 주의해주세요!) to set up the right life goals and get
psychological and physical impacts. |