Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There is no doubt that modern society has been changed and developed a lot in many ways. Because of the development, some think that there are numerous choices we can make. On the other hand, others claim the opposite opinion. I agree with the argument that we have too many decisions nowadays.
Firstly, there are too many options for eating (밑에서 잘 지적해주셨는데, 이에 대해서는 총평에서 말씀드리겠습니다.). In the past, there were not so many options when people wanted we want to eat out. However, there are a number of menus such as Chinese, Japanese and Italian. We can choose whatever we want to eat. Plus, since smartphones are made, delivery services are improved. There are various applications in smartphone for delivery, and all we have to do is choose the menu ad and pay directly. As the number of people who use delivery applications increased, more and more companies have started to participate are participated in services. In fact, there are more than 50 food companies in the delivery application in South Korea.
Second of all, it is same in culture. As technology has been developed fast, there are many TV shows and channels these days. In the past, there were only 3 or 4 channels we could watch, whereas now there are a number of programs we can watch. We can have those options thanks to the huge developments. Also, options for movies has been widened compared to the past. There were only Korean movies in the theater when I was young. Meanwhile, different types of movies came from various countries, following the global trend.
In conclusion, there are agreements and disagreements of having several choices. In my personal view, I think it is true that we have many choices. However, it has a positive effect and influence in our life and society for the reasons of developing technology and cultural trend in the global world.
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문제 처음에 보고 문제의 의도가 잘 파악이 안돼서 횡설수설 한거 같아요ㅜㅜ
선택을 해야 하는게 많아져서 안좋다는 부정적이라는 의견에 동의/비동의 하냐는건지,
아니면 그냥 선택이 많아진건지에 대해 동의/비동의 하라는건지
too의 부정적인 뉘앙스가 걸려서 답변을 애매하게 한것 같습니다,,
총평: (5/6/6/6) 6.0
말씀해주신대로 논점 파악이 잘 안 되었기 때문에 이에 관해서 보완해주셔야합니다. 위의 too 는, 말씀해주신대로 부정적인 뉘앙스가 맞습니다. 그러므로 위에 적어주셨듯이 선택지가 많아져서 안 좋다는(예를 들면 선택의 어려움) 등을 작성해주시면 되는 것이죠. 또한 바로 전 글과 마찬가지로 너무 시간이 많이 남았습니다. 연습 단계에서도 꼭 검토하는 습관을 들여주세요~수고하셨습니다 :)