Fossil fuels such as coal, oil and natural gas are the main energy source for many countries. However, some nations are using alternative energy such as solar power, or wind power.
To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In modern society, fossil fuels such as coal and oil are essential for people’s lives. Some countries use fossil fuels as much as they want because they are oil-producing countries. However, some nations start to consider alternative energy because they consider environment as well. I personally believe that this is a positive development for environment and I will discuss the/my reasons about it.
Many
developed countries already use a lot of fossil fuels especially gasoline. This
is because people use their cars almost every day for their work or daily life,
so it is indispensable in their life. However, the fossil fuels will eventually
run out and some countries have worried worry about the coming situation, thus they have developed alternative
energy. It mainly works through the nature’s power, there is no harm to earth (여기는 총평에서 링크를 넣어드리겠습니다.) and sustainable energy. Alternative energies are the ones that make our life
continuously convenient.
Moreover,
our environment is affected by people’s
activities such the excessive use of cars as using of cars a lot. There are many environmental problems
already, and some places that we cannot even recover. However,
to prevent environment from getting worse, in Korea, some countrysides have a has wind
power station that provides electricity through the wind power to maintain
factories. Due to this effect, there are also some developments such as
electronic cars which can be charged instead of gasoline. It is helpful a lot to
reduce air pollution and people consistently think developments (여건이 되면 이 developments 의 구체적인 사례를 보여주시는 게 좋긴 한데 사실 시험장에서 이정도 여유는 아마 없을 겁니다.) that are good
for environment.
In
conclusion, I think alternative energies are have many positive effects on our
society. Alternative energies can be sustainable in the future because there is
no environmental pollution.
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목표: 6.0~6.5
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항상 봐주셔서 너무 감사해요!! :)
총평: (7/7/6/6) 6.5
문법에서 이정도로 최소한의 선방만 할 수 있으면 6.0은 충분히 괜찮을 겁니다. (저는 6.5를 드리긴 했지만, 실전에서는 시간 문제도 있고 Task 1에서의 감점도 고려해야하기 때문에 냉정히 보면 6.5는 힘들 겁니다. 그래도 6.0은 괜찮을 것이고요.)
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