▶ Your Answer :
Children’s upbringing has been the
main concern of parenthood for a long time. There are several factors which
affect such. Of those, it has been argued that the lack of proximity within
family members and influence from over the
media are the most predominant causes of children’s problems.
Because of the
unstable economy nowadays, it is common to see both parents of children working
full-time in most cases. This often leads to parents having less time to spend
with their children. Even if they get a chance to have a spare
time, they would probably prefer to take a rest after having a hard day at
work. In return, children would
get more free time without sharing it with their parents. Here the media takes the
missing part. Over a century,
technology has contributed to the world with a great deal of
convenience. As a result, the means of communications has increased in
numbers. Children are more influenced by the media, such as the
internet, television, etc., which are not screened, than by their parents.
Juveniles must be
under supervision before they get matured enough to make their own decisions.
It is true that children can be educated from schools, but they need to be
taken care of after school as well. If parents do not invest their time on
communicating with their children, they would have no idea what their children
have in their minds. In order to improve this situation, governments and
companies should come up with better policies. For example, governments can
offer tax exemption for ones with children, while companies provide flexible
working hour to employees who are raising minors.
Although children’s
problems have been issues all along the ages, they can be solved with the
effort of society, especially with the effort of parents, spending
more time with their own children.
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