Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
What other measures do you think might be effective?
Some people belive that high price of gas can lower traffic and pollution. However, I do not agree with the idea, and believe there could be more effective ways to solve the problems.
First of all, there are many other reasons to use cars. People will not give up using cars because only the price of gasoline becomes cheaper (그 반대겠죠!). The Most importand motive for driving their own cars is convenience. By driving their cars, people do not need to wait for buses or trains, and they can travel on their own schedule. In addition, they do not like to spend their time in extemely crowed buses or trains. For these reasons, they choose to buy cars and drive to and from work whatever the gas price is, therefore the high price of gasoline can not the solve traffic jams and environmental problems.
To solve the problem, the government should invest in public transporation systems in order to make them more convenient and cheaper and to attract more people to use buses and trains. One of the reason that people do not prefer to use public transportation is that they are old and dirty. In addtion, some bus or train lines are too expensive to use becasue they need a huge a mount of money to mantain the lines. Therefore, if the government spends more budget to improve and subside public transporation systems, bus and subway companies can improve their facilities and lower their fare. Consequently, poeple would use public transporation more frequently, and finally the traffic congestion and polution probems can be addressed.
In conclusion, I believe increasing petrol price is not an ideal solution to solve the problems, and the government investment in the public transportation system can be a more effective alternative.
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