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The
data given illustrates how many trips were made by children in one country between
1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school utilizing different kinds of transport.
In
general, it is clear that the number of trips using numerous kinds of transport
were decreased by 2010 except for the mode of car. It seems that children who
used care to go to school have increased over the 20-year period.
Looking
at the bar graph more closely, one can see that the number of trips to and from
school using walking was the largest among other kinds of transport in 1990,
with over 12 million, followed by bus. Also, the number of trips made by cycling
as well as walking and bus was similar, although the former was a bit more
larger than the latter.
It
is also notable that the number of trips using care had become the largest
among other kinds of transport in 2010, representing over 10 million. The other
thing to be mentioned is that the number of trips using walking decreased to 6
million in the same year.
항상 첨삭감사드립니다
질문이 있는데 한번 읽어주실 수 있으실까요?
1. 위와 같이 1990년, 2010년 나누어서 문단 2개로 작성하는 것이 괜찮을까요?
2. 작성하고보니 문장구조가 the number of trips~가 반복되는 것 같습니다. 혹시 다른 문장구조로 작성한다면 어떻게 쓸 수 있을까요? 예시 하나만 부탁드립니다ㅠ-ㅠ
감사합니다! |