■ Direction· Task 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Write at least 150 words.
· Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
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INTERNATIONAL ENGLISH LANGUAGE TESTING SYSTEM WRITING ANSWER BOOKLET Candidate Name:텍스트 | Candidate Number:텍스트 | Centre Number:텍스트1 | Date:텍스트1 |
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Topic ▼
Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed,
rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What
could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own
knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. |
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Your Answer ▼
It is common to see that many people prefer working as a
self-employed more than working in corporations these days. From my point of
view, there are several drawbacks of working as a self-employed employee. This essay will
provide many reasons to substantiate my argument.
To begin with, the reason for people working as a self-employed employee is they want to earn a lot of money. In other words, there is a limit to saving
money with labour income compared to collecting money from private businesses.
In South Korea, for instance, it takes 30 years to buy a single apartment with
an average salary in Korea. In addition, another reason for doing their own business
is many people have serious stress from the company. That’s why many folks are
quitting jobs and changing the organization frequently. Severe stress and
pressure make people think about different ways to earn money from
corporations.
Firstly, the evident disadvantage of self-employed is a risk
of income. In other words, private businesses are significantly unstable.
Therefore, no one could can guarantee the profit of the business. If the business
goes well, people can earn a lot of money. However, if the situation goes bad,
it is possible to earn less than a minimum wage. For example, in South Korea, 80%
of independent businesses go went bankrupt in a year. Secondly, as a self-employed, the owner has
to manage and take care of every process. It is often argued that the people
who work their own businesses usually work more than those who are employed in
the organization.
In conclusion, today people’s preference is working as
self-employed employee rather than working in a company, even though there are several
drawbacks. Eagerness to become rich and desire to be free from stress in an
organization are exceeded the Instability and risk of doing one's own business. |
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채점 기준 | TR (Task Response) | CC (Coherence and Cohesion) | LR (Lexical Resource) | GRA (Grammatical Range and Accuracy) | Total |
Score (9점 만점) | 5 | 5 | 5 | 5 | 5 |
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