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Nowadays there are many kinds of ways of work that people can choose from to work. Some people prefer to be self-employed because they consider the negative aspects that can be experienced when working for a company or organization.
There would be some valid reasons that people prefer to be self-employed more and more because of the high entrance wall of employment and stress. First, according to the global unstable employ market, it is hard to get a job lately. Thus, it It seems to be natural that people look forward to running their own business such as opening a store or creating a start-up business, which is a kind of self-employed method. In addition, mostly workers for a company or organization experience some degree of stress from their tasks or environment. People who want to escape from these stressful aspects would want to be self-employed. They would might think that if they are self-employed in any way, they probably do not would not have to care of the relationship with bosses or co-workers and even pressure about promotion or performance.
In the case of being self-employed, some demerits will be are able to be considered. First, earning a stable profit could can not be ensured. This might be caused by a global or domestic social atmosphere or economic status. Even people's scant relevant experience or careless of management in themselves would make them keep the profit. In contrast, in this case, people could also get stress from being self-employed because they have a lack of confidence that they would not make a stable income or how long they keep themselves to be self-employed. With these worries, people might rather choose to work for a company.
To sum up, realistic conditions such as the difficulty of getting a job or the possibility of getting stress would be able to be some reasons that people choose to be self-employed. As for some demerits, people could feel hard to keep a stable profit and also get stress in terms of making a stable income or long-term plan.
첨삭에 감사 드립니다:) 선생님, 저의 플랜이 바뀌어 롸이팅에서 7점을 맞아야 하는 상황에 이르렀습니다.. 물론 TR CC LR CRA 다 잘해야 7점이상을 받을 수 있겠지만, 보다 현실적인? 조언을 주시면 매우 감하겠습니다,, 7점을 맞기 위한..
감사합니다. 오늘도 좋은 하루 보내세요:)
Task 2에서는 이렇게만 쓰시면 7점은 넘깁니다. 물론 관사 등에서 자잘한 오류는 있었지만, 관사는 어쩔 수 없는 영역이기도 하고 내용에서 충분히 커버할 수 있을 것이고요. 문제는 Task 1인데, hinodewq님 Task 1을 제가 읽어본지 시간이 조금 지나서 정확히 말씀드리기가 어렵네요. 다음에 Task 1을 2개 정도 올려주시면 확인하고 다시 말씀드리겠습니다 :)
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